One of the most difficult skills for a writer is dialog.
Clearly, dialog is not the presentation of words in the
manner we speak them. Few of us in 'conversation' use
complete sentences. Yet the sentence fragments we normally
communicate with are certainly not acceptable as written
dialog.
On the other hand, dialog that approaches prose sounds like a
speech.
Find that fine line between the way we speak and the way
we write to complete a DIALOG Exercise using a minimum of
other written material.
300 words or less, write a scene between two characters.
When the scene ends we should know the central conflict
between these two, and a great deal about their personalities.
I am going to get some help doing this summary, we're all met
Harry and Sally, might even know about "when" they met.
INT CLASSROOM WITH TABLES AND CHAIRS - DAY
SALLY
Tell me again, why are we doing this?
HARRY
Because of the EXERCISE - the DIALOG thing.
SALLY
But that's over, they only last
for a week and then . . .
(pausing to remember)
Sure, it's Lani that does it. She
announces the change. And it's
gonna happen tomorrow.
HARRY
All the more reason to wrap it up,
summarize the EXERCISE.
SALLY
Oh, please . . . Can we just move
on without all this, I mean, who
care were we been? I want to know
what's next! Where we're going.
HARRY
Well you helped, by doing this
little scene, you helped make my
point.
SALLY
Really? You've made a point?
HARRY
We have made the point.
(pointing to a stack
of paper)
Those were the subs from the week
and those . . .
(holds up a couple of
sheets from a larger
stack)
Are the CRITS.
SALLY
Big deal, I saw 'em as they came
in, I wrote some of them.
HARRY
Remember the instructions?
TITLE OVER: 300 words or less, write a scene between two
characters. When the scene ends we should know the central
conflict between these two, and a great deal about their
personalities.
SALLY
How you do that?
HARRY
What?
SALLY
(pointing to the
writing on screen)
Make all that print out on the
screen.
HARRY
Well, it's a script, I can do
almost anything I want with a
script.
SALLY
THAT is your point?
HARRY
Sort of. The only way anything
happens in a script is if an actor
does it, or says it -
SALLY
And the point would be -
HARRY
DIALOG! I thought it would be
obvious. In a script the
screenwriter gets about 120 pages
to say everything! FADE IN,
Beginning, Middle, Ending, FADE
OUT and credits - 120 pages.
SALLY
Harry, you're about to put me to
sleep here . . .
HARRY
Well, look at it. . . look at
these page.
SALLY
Okay! . . .
(picks up pages)
BEAT
SALLY
(continuing)
. . . What for?
HARRY
You're looking at two pages there,
guess how many words.
SALLY
I gotta count this one too?
HARRY
No, I'll tell you what . . . We'll
use some more of that movie Magic.
TITLE OVER: WORD COUNT - 341 (continuing)
SALLY
Oh, that's cool. Every word we say
adds to the total?
HARRY
Those two pages,
(pointing to the
pages in her hand)
They total 312 words -
HARRY
(continuing)
That's about 20,000 words in a
complete screenplay - start to
finish.
SALLY
Oh, I see what you mean. A page of
prose can be 800 words, but a page
of script is only 150.
HARRY
Were not limited in prose, you can
write until your story's told.
SALLY
But you said 120 pages?
HARRY
For a Script! At a page a minute,
that's a two hour script.
SALLY
Can't be longer?
HARRY
If it's gonna sell? 90 to 120
minutes seems to be the time
formula.
SALLY
So what's this got to do with
these EXERCISES?
HARRY
That WAS the EXERCISE - 300
words - try to define two
characters and a story conflict
using dialog.
SALLY
Oh, I see. And how'd we do.
HARRY
Mind you, this is just my opinion,
but almost everyone on the list
has at this point participated.
SALLY
That's good.
HARRY
And it has been fun.
(stacks all the
papers together)
But, it is time to stick our heads
out the window and yell - "NEXT"
EXT JUST OUTSIDE THE CLASSROOM - DAY
SALLY
(sticking her head )
(out the window)
Next!
HARRY
(popping his head out
next to hers)
Thanks everyone. Good job.
Word count remains as scene fades.
TITLE OVER: WORD COUNT - 693
FADE
OUT
This has been fun - both exercises - Lani will announce the "next"
one shortly.
If you've got those last couple of Crits to get it in - do it now.